TOEFL ライティング対策 Vol. 15（第１回受験）

*Geminiによる採点

お昼に背油ラーメンを食べてしまったため、そのあとのリーディングの勉強は中々集中できず苦戦した。一方、時間こそかかったが思っていたよりも正解する問題数が多く、分野によって正答率に差が出るものだと感じた。分野の違いによる理解力の低下は、単語力を鍛えて文章自体の理解度を高めることで解決するので地道に単語力を身につけていきたい。

After eating tonkotsu ramen for lunch, I had difficulty concentrating on my reading studies. However, I spent more time learning than I expected and was able to answer many questions correctly. I felt that the clarity of problems differs depending on the field. The low retention rate in different fields makes it easy to improve retention of spelling. Therefore, I will gradually increase my vocabulary retention.

Having a seabura ramen made me difficult to consuntlate to study of Reading. However, the more time I spent to learn but I can solve a lot of problem than I expected, so I felt that clear problem is different between wether feild is. The low retension of feild different make it easy to cover retension of spell. Therefore, I will increase the retension of vocubrally step by step.

減点箇所と減点点数:

• 文法: 10点
  • “consuntlate” -> “concentrate”
  • “the more time I spent to learn” -> “the more time I spent learning”
  • “clear problem is different between wether feild is” -> “the clarity of problems differs depending on the field”
  • “low retension of feild different” -> “low retention rate in different fields”
  • “make it easy to cover retension of spell” -> “makes it easy to improve retention of spelling”
  • “I will increase the retension of vocubrally step by step” -> “I will gradually increase my vocabulary retention”
• 語彙: 5点
  • “seabura ramen” -> “tonkotsu ramen”
  • “solve a lot of problem” -> “answer many questions correctly”
  • “clear problem” -> “clarity of problems”
  • “retention of spell” -> “retention of spelling”
  • “vocubrally” -> “vocabulary”

添削箇所と添削理由:

• 文法:
  • “consuntlate” -> “concentrate”: スペルミス
  • “the more time I spent to learn” -> “the more time I spent learning”: 動名詞の使い方が誤っている
  • “clear problem is different between wether feild is” -> “the clarity of problems differs depending on the field”: 語順と文法構造を修正
  • “low retension of feild different” -> “low retention rate in different fields”: 語彙と文法構造を修正
  • “make it easy to cover retension of spell” -> “makes it easy to improve retention of spelling”: 語彙と文法構造を修正
  • “I will increase the retension of vocubrally step by step” -> “I will gradually increase my vocabulary retention”: 語彙と文法構造を修正
• 語彙:
  • “seabura ramen” -> “tonkotsu ramen”: 日本語の「背油ラーメン」は英語で「tonkotsu ramen」
  • “solve a lot of problem” -> “answer many questions correctly”: より具体的な表現に変更
  • “clear problem” -> “clarity of problems”: より抽象的な表現に変更
  • “retention of spell” -> “retention of spelling”: スペルミス
  • “vocubrally” -> “vocabulary”: スペルミス