TOEFL ライティング対策 Vol. 2(第1回受験)

*Geminiによる採点

今日の題材

久しぶりのTOEIC模試を受けてみて全体的に習熟度が足りないと感じた。普段の学習は、繰り返し学習ではなく一回限りの学習になっていたため暗記度が低いことに問題を抱えている。そのため、早い段階で問題を一通り終わらせ、問題を覚えるまで繰り返し学習を行うのが重要であると考えた。

添削後の回答

As I took the TOEIC test, I felt that the level of retention is low. My usual study method involves completing each question only once, without repetition, which results in a low level of retention. Thus, I believe it is important to finish all the questions at an early stage and repeat them until I memorize them.

自分の解答

As I examed the TOEIC test, I fell that the level of remember is low. Usuall study is once learing not reflain study, so it is problem that the low level of remember. Thus, I consider it is important to finish learning all problem in early stage and study over and over again.

Genmiによる講評

添削箇所と添削理由

1. As I examed the TOEIC test -> As I took the TOEIC test

  • “examed” は誤字。正しくは “took”

2. I fell that the level of remember is low -> I felt that the level of retention is low

  • “fell” は誤り。正しくは “felt”
  • “remember” はより具体的な “retention” に置き換え

3. Usuall study is once learing not reflain study -> My usual study method involves completing each question only once, without repetition

  • “Usuall”, “learing”, “reflain” は誤字。正しくは “Usually”, “learning”, “repeating”
  • 文法的に自然な表現に修正

4. it is problem that the low level of remember -> The problem is the low level of retention

  • “it is problem” は不自然。”The problem is” が適切

5. Thus, I consider it is important -> Thus, I believe it is important

  • 冗長表現: “consider it is important” は “consider it important” で簡潔に表現可能

6. 問題を一通り終わらせ -> finish all the questions

  • より具体的な表現に修正

7. 問題を覚えるまで繰り返し学習を行う -> repeat them until I memorize them

  • より具体的な表現に修正

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